This is my latest short story, titled: Home.
“Look, Papa, look at
the sky.” Harriet said as she raced up the hill and pointed to the sky with
excitement. Behind her, her father, old and slow, limped. Above, the sky was just
beginning to turn to twilight and small, glittering balls of light began to dot
the darkening sky. “It’s Orion. Do you see it? Do you see it?” The small girl
was jumping up and down with excitement while her chin was tipped back to peer
at the large expanse of sky with wonder.
Harriet’s
father finally caught up and she glanced up at him, eager to lap up any praise.
He reached down and placed a hand on her shoulder. “Yep. There’s the belt right
there.” He traced the line of Orion’s Belt from where he stood on the ground.
“And his sword.”
She
twirled around in a circle with her arms spread out to mimic a bird’s, the
skirt of her dress billowed out around her to act as a parachute and keep her
on the ground. If she could make a single wish, and if her wish on the first
star she saw that night came true, she would wish very hard to be able to fly,
just so she could maybe be able to touch the stars with her small, bare hands.
“I wish Orion could be my hero” She
told her father and giggled as she fell against him and he was encouraged to
hold her up. “And not a hero for those Pleiades who continuously run away from
him.”
“That’s
because he’s not a hero, Harriet. They fear him.”
“But
what if he has just been misunderstood for years? What if his story has just
been slowly changed and he has ended up as a bad person? What if he is actually
good?”
Her
father laughed at her silliness. “I suppose it’s possible, Harriet. You can
believe anything you want to. You could also believe that you don’t need a
hero. Not a brave girl like you, huh?”
The
brave girl looked up at her father and grinned. “Am I as brave as a lion?”
“Braver.”
“As
brave as a warrior?”
“Even
braver.”
Harriet’s
grin widened. They stood together in silence for a while, the father’s arms
wrapped around his only daughter’s waist. “Okay.” Is all she said after a
while, then took her own weight back and skipped down the hill and into the
warmth of the house. The light which flooded from the doorway engulfed her
whole. Her father stood back and watched her go silently.
A
year later, Harriet’s father died in his sleep. It was unknown what caused his
death but one night, his heart just stopped. Harriet went to her father’s
funeral and every person which also went, walked past her and squeezed her
shoulder with sympathy. After the funeral, she ran home and up the hill, and
sat beneath the stars to cry and cry. The sky was a black sea of nothingness
and she sat beneath that sea until the sun broke the darkness and the stars
were forced to retreat back to their trenches.
By
the time the sun was half way risen, Harriet was ready to return back to the
house and slip beneath the warm covers of her bed. But she couldn’t. In the
driveway, an unrecognisable car was parked, and by the front door, stood a
woman with a severe haircut.
“Hello.”
The woman said and shaped her red painted lips into a stiff smile. “Harriet, is
it?” The woman extended a hand.
Harriet
shrunk away from the woman’s touch. The woman was scary. “Who are you?”
The
woman didn’t answer straight away. “I am very sorry for your loss. It must be
very hard for you.”
“Yes,”
Harriet’s voice wavered with the attempt to hold back tearful sobs. “I miss my
father very much.”
“I’m
sure you do.” The woman stared at the young girl for a moment, lips pursed as
her eyes roamed hungrily over her. Harriet was still dressed in her funeral dress,
and her hair, which had been braided back by her aunt, was still neat. “But now
you have to come along with me. Go pack your things and I’ll meet you back here
shortly.”
Young
Harriet raced through the door and gathered her teddy bear, her favourite party
dress, and her ribbons; her shoes, her tooth brush, and last but not least, her
father’s watch. She almost did
everything that she was told to do. Normally Harriet was a very good girl, but
today she couldn’t be. She didn’t want to be taken away from the beloved home
she had grown up in, where all the memories of her father hung like a ghost
trapped within the walls.
“Harriet,
dear?” She heard the woman’s voice from the front of the house. “Just about
ready?”
“Just
about.” She lied and instead of heading towards the front door like she was
supposed to do, she sprinted for the back window, suitcase in hand, and hefted
herself out, falling awkwardly to the ground outside.
“Harriet?”
The woman asked again but this time received no reply. This made the woman very
suspicious. From outside the house, Harriet heard the front door squeal on its
hinges as it was pushed open further and the heavy fall of the woman’s high
heel shoes as she wandered into the house. “Harriet, where are you? Now is
really not the time for a game of hide and seek. We really must be going. There
are things to do, people to see, you know?” Her footsteps continued further
into the house. Then they froze. The woman swore and the girl was forced to
cover her ears. Her father always told her to never listen to grown-ups when
they cursed. He said it would make her ears bleed.
Harriet
ran. In her hand, the suitcase was heavy, full to the brim with her most
precious valuables, and as she ran, it lumped on loudly after her. Moments
later, Harriet heard a scuffle behind her and then the woman was chasing her,
screaming for her to stop, and still cursing. When Harriet glanced back over
her shoulder, she instantly regretted it and wished upon the first and
brightest star she would see that night that she hadn’t. The woman’s face was
contorted into something which belonged on a wild tigress that was chasing
after her next meal. Her hair which was curly, red and short was flying in all
directions and her eyes which were narrowed in on Harriet were as sharp as a
hawk’s.
Harriet
began to cry. She cried for her father and questioned why he had left her alone
to defend for herself, she cried for herself and how she was about to be taken
away from the only place she knew to call home, and she cried for the woman who
seemed to think her entire life depended on her catching poor and innocent
children and taking them to live somewhere else. Her tears were streaming down
her face and while she ran, her chest not only heaved from the strained
exhaustion one feels when they are running, but her chest also heaved with
great big sobs.
Harriet
ran and ran and ran until her legs began to ache from exhaustion. When she
thought she had run far enough, she dropped down on top of her suitcase and
buried her face in her hands. When she glanced around herself, she could no
longer see a scary woman chasing after her… She also could not see the house.
This
was all a dream… wasn’t it? Just a horribly bad dream, a nightmare… Daddy
always told her to pinch herself if she was having a bad dream. He had always
said that was the way to wake one’s self. So that was what Harriet did and with
a small yelp of pain, she squeezed her eyes shut and pinched herself. Then she
counted to three and hoped that when she opened her eyes once more, she would
be back in her house, curled up in front of a raging fire while her father read
her favourite storybook to her.
But
that was not the case for Harriet when she opened her eyes and took in her
surroundings. Harriet discovered things were much worse than before. Now the
woman was back and staring at her with an angry and hungry expression. The
tigress was in an easy position, watching her prey with eyes that practically
screamed her hunger. She was ready to pounce, ready to take her food down, and
ready to rip the heart out.
As
the woman lunged, Harriet screamed and threw her arms up over her head. For a
while, Harriet put up a fight—she kicked her legs around and tossed her arms
and her head. The woman clutched the girl’s forearm and held on until the
struggle began to ease.
After
running for such an extended period of time, Harriet was very tired. After just
moments of fighting, Harriet gave in, too tired to fight anymore. The woman
pulled the girl to her feet, reached down and collected Harriet’s suitcase and
started back towards the house and the car.
Without
Harriet and her father in the house, it looked rather old and lonely. As
Harriet wandered back to her old home, she couldn’t help but notice all of the
old signs of wear which affected the house’s beauty. But then she thought the
signs of wear made the house look like home to her, because it showed her the
amount of love which had been felt inside those orange coated walls. This made
Harriet very happy, but also sad at the same time, knowing that she could no
longer contribute to that love or the memories.
Harriet
followed the woman to her car and sat in the backseat quietly, while the woman
occupied the driver’s seat and cranked up the radio until Girls Just Wanna Have Fun by Cyndi Lauper was blasting through the
speakers. With the old radio playing in the background, they drove for what
felt like hours to little Harriet, stopping only once for petrol.
The
house they pulled into was nothing like Harriet’s old home. The plain, old, red
bricks lacked personality and love. Looking at the house, Harriet suddenly
didn’t want to get out of the car. She would have much preferred to remain in
the safety of the seatbelt. But she had no choice. The woman came around to her
side and opened the door, waiting for Harriet to step out with her suitcase in
hand.
Silently,
they walked up to the front door, the woman knocked on the hard wood, and they
waited for somebody to answer. A man came to the door and instantly his eyes
were on little Harriet.
“Do
we have ourselves another one?” The man said.
“Yes,”
said the woman and propelled the girl inside. Harriet was marched past the man
and through the house. They entered a room with beige lounge chairs and a group
of children sat playing on the carpet. There were about ten of them and as soon
as they saw Harriet arrive, they all swarmed around her like she was the honey
to their bees.
“Do
you have a daddy?” A little boy, who was about her age asked after he had
tugged on her sleeve.
“No.”
“Neither
do I. What about a mummy?” Harriet shook her head and the little boy nodded in
understanding. “Neither do I. Neither do any of us. That’s why we’re here, you
see? But that’s okay. We don’t need a mummy or a daddy when we have each other.
You’ll see. We’ll become great friends in no time.”
Over
the time that Harriet spent in her new home, several of her friends, including
the little boy who had first talked to her, disappeared to places she did not
know and never returned. When she asked the woman and the man where they had
gone, they told her they had found a new mummy and daddy and soon she would
too.
One
day when Harriet was reading a book with another orphan, a couple came knocking
on the door and asked if they could take a child home. The couple’s eyes
scanned the many children who sat before a roaring fire, playing with model
trains and paints. Their eyes landed on a small girl who sat in the corner with
a worn book in her hands. They began whispering to each other, both of them
nodding in agreement.
The
couple wandered over to the woman who had brought Harriet to this house and
after a small conversation, the woman beckoned Harriet over to them. Harriet
placed the book down on the ground and walked up to the strangers. They smiled
at her.
Hey again Maddie!
ReplyDeleteSo reading your short story/flash fiction was really quite interesting! I know I'm just a random bloke on the internet, but well, I figured I'd offer some kind of response to it anyway, as good writing should never be unread.
First of all, I like it right off the bat - it's heartwarming and endearing, and to be honest, it pulls the heartstrings. As an overall piece, you nailed the highs and lows - a lovely father-and-daughter opening, followed by a loss, then fear of the unknown; you even managed to fit an action sequence in, for which I commend you. Not often a piece like this would go there, so good work on that! The ending too was pretty good - it's interesting how you approached Harriet struggling to accept being taken to an orphanage, it seemed quite realistic.
It's really not my place to critique too much else without being asked to, but your narrative style is pretty nice. I'm much snapper with my phrasing, but your style carries a light, contemporary style, and I quite liked the animal metaphors in there about the tiger - it helped to identify and characterize the orphanage lady, and given the reference to tiger, it made her an enemy instantly with little effort; again, excellent work.
Basically - it's a great piece, and you should be proud of it.